After discussion with my tutor and with OCA Student Support it was agreed that I would submit Assignment 6 before Assignment 5. This was on the basis that all the work was completed towards Assignment 6 and, with this switch, I would have more time to work on Assignment 5, the self-directed Project.
The written feedback PDF for Assignment 6 can be accessed below.
Reflections on the feedback
It felt good to have a ‘well done’ from my tutor for strategically working down the wider edit and to have confirmation that my text was thoughtful, detailed and reflected developments in the process of my work. From there my tutor picked up on my concerns about narrative coherence in recording seasonal change and challenged me to give more consideration on what ‘coherence’ might look like and think more on why this might concern me . That’s a really good point given that, in writing about my major influences here, I had recollected Susan Trangmar’s film “A Play in Time” which jumped forwards and backwards in time rather than chronologically and Andy Sewell’s apparently random flow of images in “The Heath” – both of which strategies appealed to me. I had recognised that the seasons flow and merge in their own cycles rather than adhere to convenient meteorological dates and so my strategy for some internal coherence had been to link the seasons together by including images of the same views and trees but also include different human interventions This had taken me some way along a more creative path but stopped me short at the point where I needed to think on how to present them.
In thinking of coherence my tutor is suggesting I consider other aspects when she writes, “I suspect the key reasons will be related to the visual qualities of the image, the colour palettes and compositions”. With different light conditions also in the mix, “It is important to become conscious of these subtle differences in your images in order for you to rationalize them with confidence”. Suggested solutions ways forward are:
- Combine ‘tones’ to show different kinds of ‘winter’ or ‘spring’ and how the light ebbs and flows
- Edit images together as one sequence; titling the works in such a way as to show I’m working between the two
- Keep in mind my thoughts on Susan Trangmar’s work and my clear articulation of what I have connected with; how it ‘jumps backwards and forwards’ whilst creating a project that has its own internal rhythm.
- Amend my statement along with my new edit thus re-articulating my final vision and bringing the crux of what I’m trying to express to the fore
I also need to think about my tutor’s further comments that I have enough interesting images in my wider edit to be able to avoid more obvious depictions of seasonal change such as close-ups of buds and blossoms, plus her personal preference for images that retain more of a distance and similar vantage point. Do I also need to be as specific regarding Winter and Spring; what about the images of November for example?
There is much to think about here so I’ll be writing further. In the meantime I have already made slight alterations to the structure of my learning log, as suggested, will continue with coursework for Assignment 5 and have ordered In the Dark Room, the book by Brian Dillon, which my tutor has recommended in connection with my Critical Review (Assignment 4).